having a pet is very good for charactor. in america,there most people raise pets. i love animal.and my favorite animal is dog.kind of puppy.last year,there was one whistle get up. i received one massage from my parents. in massage perents said 'yoon ha, today you'll get one dog it's a dachshund!it is puppy.' after i received this massage.i was so exciting.i just waiting for him.....
when my dog come to home,it was so small. after few minutesdad tell to me and my brother.
'he is a baby so you and edwin have to keep careful .' but now he is almost one years old.when wsaw him first time, he was strange about our family. however, when my family give a lots of affection to him, i think he felt like this. 'there are my family' and our family thought like that too.
now we are giving a lots of affection to him.because he is my family.in my opinion,when we raise a pet, we have yo give affection to pet.
then pet will think like this 'there are my family!'then pet can be our family. then it is not lonely.it will be more fun!!
Yoonha,
ReplyDeleteInteresting topic. What would have made your essay better was if youe had checked for grammatical and syntactical errors. Some of your sentences were either incomplete or they had the wrong vocabulary, so the message was not clear. In addition, I would like you to really think what details are important to include in your writing. For example, when you wrote "last year,there was one whistle get up. i received one massage from my parents." The first line was unnecessary because all you needed to say was that you received a message from your parents.